October Writing Challenge Entry- Moose

October Writing Challenge


On a dreary October night, Robert sat absent mindedly watching the news. It had been raining for well over a month now with no end in sight. The rain pattered against the window and the wind howled. For the first part of October it was unseasonably cold even for Iowa. As the weather man droned on Bob grew weary and soon drifted off into a bored slumber.


When Bob awoke, he noticed that for once it was sunny outside. Birds chirped happily, and children ran the streets playing. Bob walked out his front door and was greeted by the warm sun on his face.


This is odd, thought Bob, it is supposed to be cold and rainy for weeks.


As the thought crossed his mind Bob felt a sharp stabbing pain in the base of his neck. He shook it off and decided it was time for a nice long walk.


As Robert walked, something seemed wronged. Cars were different colors, trees and landscapes were out of place. Every time Bob noticed something that seemed off, that sharp pain returned, and he put his head down to continue his walk.


After a decently long walk, Bob turned around to return home. As he walked he noticed again, that certain cars were a different color than when he walked past them the first time. The sharp pain returned but this time he ignored it, pushing on. The pain grew until Bob couldn’t take it any longer. Bob collapsed on the green lush grass in front of his house begging to know what was happening. Bob crawled forward crying out in agony.


“Enough!” came a raspy voice from behind him.


Bob turned and saw a tall figure standing right behind him. The face resembled that of a man but was missing large chunks of skin and muscle, exposing the skull underneath. The creature raised its bony hands void of all tissue and shot strings from their fingertips. The strings hooked themselves to Bob’s neck, arms, hands, legs, feet and the top of his skull. The creature forced Bob to his feet by pulling on the strings attached to him by large metal fishing hooks. His skin tore under the pressure as he screamed, but the creature continued to pull.


“Come.” The creature pulled Bob forward, tearing skin and muscle from bone. Bob tried to struggle but the creature was to strong. The more Bob fought he could feel his tissues tear. Blood began to soak threw his clothing as the ground feel away from the creature’s feet. As the creature pulled, the portal opened wider. Bob was dragged forward, screaming for help. Reaching the creatures side, he saw it smile, the face splitting in the middle to reveal razor sharp needle shaped teeth.


“Soon your life will be mine”, The creature rasped. Bob felt his skin begin to melt and tear away as the spots of missing tissue were filling in on the creature. Once the creature had assumed Bob’s visage, his lifeless body was thrown into the portal.


“This will have to do for now…”

One thought on “October Writing Challenge Entry- Moose

  1. Moose, this is good stuff. I cannot really say anthing negative about it. it’s good. But you can tell those things you desribe in action. The “show don’t tell” idea. You can show it was dark or the time of year by connecting action to it. A great Halloween scare! Thanks

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